“Is there a character who represents some issues from the era, are there characters who function as members of the society at the time?” is still vague. The question of “Which issues of the era does Hamilton represent?” wasn’t answered clearly- you’ve only revised the first sentence. Please replace all vague and unclear sentences with relevant ideas. Focus on the main question.
-The following comment still wasn’t properly followed: “Besides, in section “How does the music reflect the culture that produced it?” you have mentioned the issue of diversity in Hamilton. However, it would be better to identify the specific examples here as you have done regarding the ratio of female songs.” Please delete general repetitive content and instead provide appropriate evidence. Both sections need to be thoroughly rewritten- don’t just paraphrase some of the sentences or randomly replace a couple of words with their synonyms.
– The given comment was also disregarded: “Add a clear conclusion to the essay. It has to briefly summarize the paper’s main points. The three sentences you’ve added this time are extremely vague and irrelevant- instead, please replace them with appropriate content. Start with restating the thesis by making the same point with other words, review your supporting ideas by summarizing all arguments by paraphrasing how you proved the thesis, connect back to the essay hook and relate your closing statement to the opening one, and combine all the above to improved and expanded conclusion.”- please properly address the issue this time.
-The paper still contains too many poorly-worded sentences that don’t make sense. Please thoroughly proofread the whole paper to eliminate the problem.
“In his musical production, Hamilton used music, lyrics, and dancing because they were the most important pedagogical tools in storytelling.”- Alexander Hamilton is the main character, the musical was produced by a creative team; please clarify why those tools are pedagogical; the following question could still be applied to the revised version: “did Hamilton himself taught someone music?” The idea is still irrelevant and poorly-worded.
“Whsentence any clearer.
